Conclusions that better tie the sins together

I am going to try to come up with two possible alternative conclusions to the seven deadly sins paper. My previous conclusion ended the story and did not elaborate on anything. I want these new conclusions to be added after the old conclusion and tie the essay together.
Here is the original conclusion, this should serve as a point of reference:

That night two men were arrested. Two persons were also found dead. A young nurse of twenty-three named Rebecca and a sixty-nine year old resident of Yollingdales, Herbert, were brutally murdered in the same bathroom George unloaded his crab. Paul and Petey, the two arrested, are not suspects in the murders. One resident, Harry, was nowhere to be found.


1. With this conclusion, I am going to make a personal appeal. This conclusion will be a call to action for the reader to avoid the seven deadly sins. By doing so, I am restating the overall theme and clearly stating what the essay was about.

Yollingdales does not simply apply to old people. The story you have just read manifests itself throughout the world, although perhaps not in such gory events. The sins committed by the staff and residents at Yollingdales all play an integral part in the lives of each person on planet Earth. These sins are gluttony, greed, lust, wrath, envy, pride, and sloth and they are infused in our daily routines. On behalf of the owner of Yollingdales, I would like to ask you, the reader, to avoid these sins to the best of your ability. The earlier you start working on yourself, the more chance there is of avoiding the fates of the individuals described above.

2. This conclusions will ask the reader a specific question that will require the reader to think about the essay and its purpose. The question directly ties in with the story. The main purpose and theme of the essay are clearly given as well.

How do you connect to the story? Of course, the horrific events at Yollingdales border on the extreme, but each person involved exhibited one of seven deadly flaws, sometimes even a combination of them. We all witness and embody these flaws daily. Everybody has felt jealousy, greed, lust, laziness, anger, pride, and a deep, unsatisfiable hunger for something. Without flaws, there would be no humanity. So, let me ask again, how do you connect to this story?

My personal favorite is the second one. It is more solid and makes you think. The reader really gets involved. The first conclusion isn't bad, but it is not as interesting as the second. I learned that conclusions need to sum up the essay and be interesting and the second conclusion better fits the criteria of what I learned, at least in my opinion.